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Heatherstoner
07-17-2002, 11:10 PM
Heatherstoners


EXT.HEATHERSTONE DEVELOPMENT-SUNNY DAY

Blender walks out of a house and begins to walk down his driveway, opens his mailbox to find nothing there and starts walking down the street.

As Blender continues to make his way out of the neighborhood kids on their bikes and houses are being panned.

Blender passes two guys fighting on the street and when he passes the two fighting look up and wave happily and then continue to brawl.

Blender finally makes it to the entrance of Heatherstone, which is a hill, and a couple with a baby carriage passes him. As soon as they pass the couple begins to argue about something and don’t notice that their baby carriage has rolled down the hill.

Blender then walks out of the Heatherstone, passing the sign to the entrance as we pan on it for a few seconds. He then starts walking down the street and from a backside he is picking at his butt. After a while of walking down the street it seems that Blender is going out of his way to do something important when he finally arrives at COE Manufacturing.

BLENDER
(Scratches his head and looks completely confused)
Wait a minute…what am I doing here? Ah well…

He then heads for home.


OPENING CREDITS

INT.TRAVIS’S BEDROOM-EARLY MORNING

Travis is asleep on his top bunk in a room strewn with clothes all over the floor and hanging over his bed. His room is as messy and contains things a regular teenage boy would have in it.

Travis has the sheets of his bed pulled over his head. He lets out a weak groan as he begins to wake. He pulls off the covers only to notice he has a pair of briefs on his head. Travis pulls them off, sniffs them, and shrugs as if they are usable for the day and begins to get out of bed.

Travis walks down the ladder from his upper bunk and leaves his bedroom, walking towards the kitchen in his boxers. He opens the refrigerator and pulls out a carton of milk from the back.

TRAVIS
Drink by August 1987…

He puts the milk on the counter and opens up the cupboard to pick out a cereal. He takes a small bowl and figures it isn’t enough and finds the biggest bowl in the house to eat his cereal out of. He pours himself his cereal and then he pours a glass of juice.

He sits down at a table to eat his breakfast and read the newspaper. Before he can take his first bite, he glances over at the computer and walks over to turn it on. He walks back to his cereal and situates himself. Yet again, before his first taste, the dog needs to be let outside.

INT.NEAL’S HOUSE-EARLY MORNING

An alarm clock reads 6:59 and turns to 7:00 and the alarm goes off. It continues to go off for some time until Neal opens one eye to observe the commotion. He pulls a bat out and smashes the alarm clock and lies back in bed. On the floor there is piles of pop cans and chip bags and trash and one bottle of oil. Neal unknowingly picks up the oil and drinks it with no problem.

He gets out of bed with a teddy bear and heads outside to get the paper. He brings it back in, reads the front page, gets excited and races to the phone.

INT.TRAVIS’S HOUSE

TRAVIS
Lady, listen, you have the wrong number. I don’t sell vibrators…yes…alright…bye.
(Hangs up phone)

After he hangs up the phone then rings again

TRAVIS
Lady, go buy your vibrators somewhere else!

NEAL
Travis?

TRAVIS
Neal?


NEAL
Alive and in color.

TRAVIS
Why are you calling me at this ungodly hour?

NEAL
Do you get the paper?

TRAVIS
Yeah, it’s in front of me now, why?

NEAL
Read section C.

TRAVIS
(Gets out section C of the newspaper)
Wow, JCPenny is having a sale.

NEAL
No, you anal probe check the front.

TRAVIS
(Takes a sip of juice and then spits it out)
Butt Plugs From The Dimension Of Lesbian Munchkins: The Second Coming comes out today?!

NEAL
That’s today? Wait that’s not that read the bottom.

TRAVIS
Oh, I don’t have the bottom part, you know that naked hobo that’s been running around here lately?

NEAL
Yeah.

TRAVIS
Well he must have been eating at my newspaper again. We should call the pound or something. What was it that was so important?

NEAL
Remember that time when we said we should write a movie together?

TRAVIS
No, when was this?

NEAL
It was yesterday. (Pauses) Anyway, I was skimming through it and I came across this contest to write a movie.


as you can see very rough and stuff so feedback is good and off the wall ideas for in between scenes for laughter would be great...and hey if you contribute ill put you in the credits when its filmed!

Lexell Studios
07-17-2002, 11:24 PM
What thats it? Thats all you wrote? I want more post more of the script please http://www.joblo.com/ubb/smile.gif I thought it was pretty Damn Hilarious.
Lex

Heatherstoner
07-17-2002, 11:27 PM
im gonna write more be patient Lex

RavenBlade
07-18-2002, 01:50 AM
It is funny, i like it.
One thing though, you explaine to much
about whats going on in the world in your script, before talking takes place, there needs to be a little interaction with people.
Like when Travis is walking, maybe have himself mumble incoherently to himself.

It's still good though, don't get me wrong.
I really dug what i was reading, and that makes for a good script.
Keep up the good work.

docholiday_13
07-18-2002, 02:22 AM
This is one of the better scripts I've read on here. I would honestly like to read more. It's very clever and funny as shit, keep em coming.

Heatherstoner
07-18-2002, 11:28 AM
im going to keep writing the script so ill keep posting but if you would want me to email it to you just tell me

blankpage
07-18-2002, 11:34 AM
That is a fine script you have going heartherstoner,like your name.Just a question though what does the part with Blender have to do in the script.

Keep up the good work!!

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Heatherstoner
07-18-2002, 11:38 AM
im just in the beginning but throughout the movie you notice that the whole neighborhood is pretty messed up and blender is just a weird kid

Zing!
07-18-2002, 12:22 PM
Heatherstoner - your script excerpt has some funny bits (I liked the part about the naked hobo eating the newspaper) and some things that have been done to death (the JC Penny's having a sale gag was done in "Airplane!" and can be seen on "Friends" and other sitcoms quite regularly - I would try to think of something fresh and original to put there instead...) One quick comment about your writing - one thing to keep in mind when writing a script is this: Do not use camera movement! Unless you are specifically writing a shooting script, such phrases as: "...houses are being panned..." should be left to the director. Show, don't tell!

Good job! http://www.joblo.com/ubb/smile.gif