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Wolfe4086
03-08-2009, 07:06 PM
Figured I would take a chance and post something I am working on here since everyone else is sharing. Let me first explain the premise behind the work. In the world we are creating for the company I am starting we formed various groups. The focus of this particular story is Lucinda Von Richten a member of the Daughters of Khali. Mind you I am a male so writing from a female POV is a bit of a challenge but this is the first part of knowing how I am a longer story than I anticipate. Also remember I went to Philly Public Schools so my grammar sucks. :(

Blood Thirst

“Greeting Boys and Girls, this is DJ Dot Deth coming to you live from the Killadelphia Sprawl with the latest and greatest killboard tallies. It seems the up and coming Thrill Kill Gang the Ghouls have gotten into a blowout with their rivals the Homicides. The fighting took place in a Mega-Burger located at K and A. And the boys in black the Forsetti Police Services rolled in deep to stop the action. The battle spread to a nearby train station packed with rush hour commuters. So the Killboard is at twenty three civilians killed forty seven wounded. Eight Ghouls died undetermined wounded. The Homicides suffered sixteen dead and of those 4 of them died in custody of the black clad goons. The Forsetti Corporation lost 3 employees and 9 wounded. So this next song goes out to the winners of the fight THE GHOULS! Remember guys KILL KILL KILL!!!!”
The radio begins to blare the guttural vocals of the death core band Meatgrinder as Lucinda hums along. She sits at the mirror doing her make up for tonight’s festivities. Carefully and tastefully she applies her mascara checking the mirror as she does so. As she is putting on her blood red lipstick Claudia walks in.
“Planning on going out are we?”
Lucinda simply smiles into the mirror like a hungry she-wolf. “Well, I do need to feed and my previous playtoy did not last very long.”
“Your nocturnal jaunts are drawing attraction to our order, Lucinda”
“I follow the rules of our order and dispose of the bodies properly.”
“Yes you do however the end the result what concerns me. You are reckless and sooner or later the Dragon Corps will get curious.”
“They can be curious all they like I cover my tracks well. Nothing will come back to the Chapter House.”
“I am giving you a direct order to limit your hunts. I am sure our Goddess enjoys the sacrifices you provide however discretion is important.”
“Of course Mistress, I will do as you command.” Lucinda smirks and goes back to glancing at the mirror.
Annoyed Claudia turns and storms out of the room slamming the door as she does so.

Lucinda continues to hum along with the song as slips on a pair of thigh high leather boots. After she adjusts the straps she stands up looking once more into the mirror. Satisfied with her appear she grabs her purse and leaves the Chapter House. Her heels click down the walkway as she heads towards her metallic black Blitz and speeds off into the night. The sounds of WKILL radio blares inside the confined space of the sports car. Lucinda taps the steering wheel to the rhythmic beat of an industrial song while pondering where she will go.
“Perhaps the Slaughterhouse is in order for tonight. Since my last meal came from the Bloody Rose and I don’t feel like being hassled by the bitches from the Sisterhood of Lilith.”
With a slight frown at the thought of the Sisterhoods of Lilith she makes her decision.
“Slaughterhouse it is.”
The engine roars into life as she pushes the accelerator down. The Blitz launches forward pushing Lucinda into the seat as she bops her head to the beat of the music. She pulls into a parking spot near the club and makes her way up to the front door. The muffled sounds of music can be heard vibrating the doors as two large imposing bouncers stand in front. Immediately they recognize Lucinda and let her in without question. Lucinda pays the admissions girl and walks off into club.

Walking into the club her eyes are assaulted by the assorted strobe lights and flashing lasers. Giving her eyes a few seconds to adjust she glances around the packed club. Making her way through the throng she sees fellow members of her order. Discreetly she acknowledges them with a hand sign and a subtle nod. Ordering a glass of blood from the bartender she casually drinks as she surveys the environment.
“A shame so many playthings and that bitch Claudia orders me not to indulge.” Lucinda thinks to herself.
“You look rather annoyed, Lucinda” a sultry voice comes from her blind side.
Turning to face the voice Lucinda’s lip raises slightly in a feral sneer. “Hello Laura, any special reason you are gracing me with your presence.”
Laura stands with her arms folded across her chest. Her dark brown eyes glare at Lucinda accusingly. “Mistress Claudia..”
Cutting her off mid-sentence Lucinda snaps “Your mother is what you should be saying. She assigned you to watch over me to make sure I comply with her demands.”
“She did ask me to remind you of her orders.’
“Well now you did and you can walk your tight little ass away now.”
Shaking her head Laura turns abruptly her long black hair whips around brushing across Lucinda’s face. Storming away Lucinda glares at Laura with pure malevolence in her emerald green eyes.

Quickly Lucinda drains the wineglass and puts it down. Her rage washes over her at the indignity of being watched over and she clenches her hands tightly causing the knuckles to turn white. Taking a deep breath she calms herself and closes her eyes. Finding her center she is able to control her anger. As she opens her eyes she catches a man dressed in a leather priest style robe eyeing her up. A smile forms on her face as she now has an object to vent her frustrations on. Adjusting her short leather dress she walks towards her target seductively.
“Hi there, couldn’t help but notice you looking at me” Lucinda says as she runs her hand through her long brown hair.
“Yeah, saw you talking to that other girl and I didn’t want to interrupt.”
“Well my name is Lucinda.” She extends her hand.
“My name is David, and it is a pleasure to meet you.” He says as he kisses the top of her hand.
“Well David, I hope you like games.”
“I love all kinds of. What do you have in mind?”
“How about a little tie you up and tie you down?”
“Sounds delightful, shall we go your place or mine?”
“Your place will work just fine. So lead the way.” Lucinda smiles seductively.

Lucinda offers her arm to David who politely takes it and holds her hand. Making their way from the bar they cut through the crowd. As they near the exit Laura appears impeding their progress. She stands with her hands on her hips and her breasts heaving through the material of her long black dress. Her face fixed in a disapproving scowl.
“And just where are we going with a new friend?”
“Jealous that I easily find myself a playmate while you are going to go home alone as usual?”
“Perhaps it is more likely that I follow the orders of my superiors.”
“I think it is more like the fact you are a kiss ass now get the fuck out of my way you prattling cow.” Lucinda retorts as she shoves Laura out of the way.
The force of the shove knocks Laura over the arm of a loveseat causing her to land on a couple that are feeding from a young fair skinned emo boy. With a snarl she sits upright on the arm of the loveseat only to watch Lucinda and David exit the club.

Once outside the commotion of the club a cool wind washes over the pair. Leading David to her car she pauses to violently slam him against the car kissing him deeply. Breaking the kiss she nips him on his lower lip drawing blood. Shocked David touches his lips and notices the blood.
“A bit aggressive are we?”
Grabbing his hand forcefully she seductively smiles as she runs her pierced tongue along his fingers tasting his life nectar before sucking on them.
“You don’t like a dominant woman?”
“Um I mean I was just not ready that’s all.”
“Well David, you better be ready for the biggest thrill of your life.”
While still holding his hand she slides it down the front of her dress and sliding it underneath. Lucinda moans softly in David’s ear as she lets his fingers explore her womanhood. A grin forms on David’s face as he realizes she is not wearing any form of underwear.
“Oh I’m ready!”
“Good Lover, now let’s get over to your place so we can play.”
Clicking the button on the Blitz’s remote the doors unlock Lucinda climbs into the vehicle and starts the engine. Like a 6yr old going to an amusement park for the first time David scampers around the side of the car and jumps into the passenger seat. Lucinda reaches across and gives his crotch a playful squeeze before gunning the engine.
“So where do you live?”
“1430 Locust Street”
“Hope your neighbors won’t mind the noise, Sugar.”
“Nah, the apartments are soundproofed.”
“All the better.” Lucinda smiles ferally.

The drive through the crowded streets of Center City Philadelphia is uneventful. Only the sounds of aggrotech music can be heard inside the confines of the car as Lucinda envisions her plans for the unsuspecting David. Finding a parking spot nearby the pair get out of the car and once more Lucinda playfully teases David. Pausing for a moment she opens the trunk and pulls out a black courier bag.
“Don’t want to forget the toys.”
“Wow are you always this prepared?”
“Of course Sugar. I am always ready for games.”

countchocula
03-10-2009, 05:00 PM
I don't get it. Are you looking for constructive criticism or do you just want someone to read it? I'm assuming the girl is a vampire. I'm not really sure what to say about it, but I thought I'd post something since no one else has.

Wolfe4086
03-12-2009, 01:07 PM
Actually moreso for constructive criticism.