HELP! I'm drowning in white paper!

[Ryanhall]

I've been working on a draft of this confounded thing for a while. I've made changes that people have suggested and I have made changes I thought needed to be made. And I've made some major changes with the ending that I'm not entirely sure work very well.

I appreciate the feedback I've gotten on this so far and I'd like some more.

As you can probably tell, I've gotten quite frustrated with this thing. It isn't finished because I'm not happy with it yet. But, I don't know what needs changing.

Can you help a schmoe out?

Ryan

PS. I'll be more than happy to return the favor if asked..

[This message has been edited by Ryanhall (edited 07-22-2002).]

[Lexell Studios]

Hey this is Lex
If your script is finished and it looks and sounds like a big blob rewrite the whole thing until it all makes sense, if your not finished just keep going until you are then take my advice.
Oh yeah you can read part of my new series I just posted part of the first episode,check it out it's called THE DEMENSION ROOM PART OF THE FIRST EPISODE it's sort of like the Twilight Zone.
Lex