4th world war (logline)

[dindio]

title 4th world war
genre: science fiction, action, futurist
logline: United States is attacked by a mighty cyborg army.

plot:I
t's the year 2050.Dr Phoenim a Robotic Engineer, is frustated when lossing his job in NASA, after been sued for a terrorist programming act that he didn't, takes revenge of everyone, creating with the most advanced technology and robotic a weird cyborg army to destroy the country, until USA human army and navy declare war to cyborg army facing the hardest battle ever
between humans and cyborgs

[sal306]

So, then you mean.................Terminator 4?




Sal306

[Ronaldinho]

Movies are about people.

Your logline should convey to me who the characters are that I'm going to care about. Who am I identifying with in the story?

[dindio]

The script is about a mad computer engineer who takes revenge creating cyborgs to destroy the world

[Ronaldinho]

How are you going to get me to empathize with him?

[Cyd V]

*SARCASM ALERT*

Who can't empathize with a mad scientist with plans of world domination:confused:

[Captain Planet]

Originally posted by dindio
The script is about a mad computer engineer who takes revenge creating cyborgs to destroy the world

Actually this is better than your current logline. It's not good, but it's better. May I suggest a "by" or a comma between 'revenge' and 'creating'.

Your plot is incoherent. It's one long sentence. You need a full stop, or two, or three.

[sal306]

I think you should call the computer system he creates SKYNET. I have a feeling that would really catch on.

Just a hunch,

Sal306