!?! - Script

[Gluttony]

!?! is the title of my new script. Over the years that I have been watching horror, posting on these boards, and writing rambling reviews, I have also done my fair share of creative work. I figured that I would finally start a thread and get some reactions from the story and any suggestions on what to put in and what sort of "feel" you guys (schmoes) think it should have.

The movie is NOT specifically a horror movie, but it contains nearly every influence I have gathered throughout my cimenatic journies. The first draft of my script is about half way finished and has has already been read by a few close friends of mine (both reactions led to concern on my supposed drug addiction (which doesn't fucking exist!)).

I will post a story summary within the next couple of days and feel free to ask questions on characters or whatever floats to your minds.

Above all, I have learned much from my experience writing this movie. I have alienated friends, family, and peers to realize what little I have accomplished and I have come to accept the fact that I have a depraved humor that doesn't market to everyone.

The basis of !?! is that it contains a well treaded narrative, but experiments heavily with layers of substance. My goal is to both prove to myself that spontaneous writing (filling in details at spur of the moment) doesn't destroy a constant flowing narrative. Also, I am writing this because it needs to be written, the story was originally developed in the summer of 2001 and I will hopefully complete the script before summer of 2005.

Though this is an experiment in many ways, the main goal for me and anyone willing to watch it is that it will entertain. There will be a variety of reactions amongst the audience as a whole and the movie will be a memorable experience in positive or negative ways.

Please post if you are interested, and feel free to suggest anything you wish. My script has undergone more changes than I can remember and the weirder it is, the more I am happy about it.

Here are some themes that I have hit on since I began:

Religious frustration, teacher student relationships, the communist similarities of school systems, teen drama, transexuality, feminist dominance, greed, conflictionist psychology (I am of course, a conflictionist), troma violence, the meaning of violence, more religion, melding genres, prop comedy, background noise, donkeys... there's more too!

Until I get the plot synopsis up... this is all I have to say.

[X-Nightcrawler]

Sounds good, I'd read it.

However, I'd change the title. "!?!" isn't good.

[countchocula]

I love the title. I can only imagine what the synopsis will bring.

[Cronos]

I like the title and wouldnt mind hearing more about it

[Gluttony]

The title, if anyone is curious, came about because that was the reaction every single person gave me after reading the script. I loved the idea and it fit the story.

the plot summary:

Tom is a senior in high school who has a rare form of leprosy that causes a cartoonish loss of limbs whenever stress is applied to them. His only dream as a school student is to start on his high school basketball team because his enviornment establishes that as popular and happiness. His mad scientist father creates a serum that allows him to reattach his limbs once they have been severed, leaving him to finally make the roster in his last year. Along the way, he also meets a young cheerleader you is one of the few people who shows interest in him and finds conflict with a transvestite squad leader bent on carnal pleasure. Tom's topsy turvey life eventually escalates in tension, all leading up to the first game... the one where he finally gets to realize his dream.

END SUMMARY

I know, it sounds really corny and I honestly would have written the summary better if I had the tme (I am currently posting from an unsavory location). The movie doesn't sound like it has many horror elements from the narrative aspect, but the little details are where my influences seem to shine through.

Think of it as a Troma movie, with less outright sex and more story.

I was looking through what I have written so far and complied some of the inspirations I've had to give you the gist of what the movie would be like. So here it is:

30s Propaganda film (Reefer Madness), Coleman Francis (The Beast of Yucca Flats), Troma (and lots of it!), Airplane, Kung-fu, Dead Alive and Evil Dead, and if anyone knows about a movie called Monster High (1989), then you would have a less spastic idea of where the "feel" of this movie is coming from.

All in all, the movie is supposed to be funny, stupid, and slightly befuddling. I don't expect anyone not looking to psycho-analyze the confines of my brain to get much serious substance out of a movie that is built by little more than my own need for creating/telling stories and the love of a medium. Except for religion, I just can't shut up about that religion...

If anyone wants an even more detailed plot (one that would stand as an outline of the main events), just speak up and I write it up on the computer.

I should be able to create a table with all the characters and a little bit of description by the middle of next week, I've got a long way to go before I sleep and I'm still doing a bit of research before I write a few scenes. I appreciate all of the interest I've gotten though, so for everyone who has posted so far, thanks for the support. This is turning into a giant negative and positive moment in my life and all the reassurance I get is comforting.

Until later... um, be comforted that there is somebody in the world sick enough to make a comedy about leprosy, Jesus, and transvetsite kung-fu cheerleaders.

[Dead Zed]

Now I'm curious! Kung-fu transvestite cheer-leaders?? AND Jesus?? This shows promise!

[C-Desecration-]

I know, it sounds really corny and I honestly would have written the summary better if I had the tme (I am currently posting from an unsavory location).


How is that corny? It's cheesy, and that's what you're aiming for. Thankfully it isn't tired cheesy, it's new, exciting cheesy. Not my type of movie/story, so I'm pretty ignorant on the plots and feel of these sorts of flicks, but still, sounds unique.
I was hoping you'd lean more towards these weird . . . 'handicaps' with more of the students.
Anyways, sounds good for this type of story.

[countchocula]

I'm liking the sound of it. I hope there's an emphasis on random humor. There isn't nearly enough randomness in comedies these days. Push the envelope, and then piss on it.

[adamjohnson]

Honestly youre going to HAVE to change the title. Its cool and everything, but imagine the radio ads.

This summer... exclamation point, question mark, excalmation point. Youll be excited AND confused!

You have to have an actual word. Even if its the PI symbol, people can still SAY PI.

[countchocula]

Calling it Exclamation Point, Question Mark, Exclamation Point is just stupid enough to work. Leprosy & Cheerleaders is a possible alternative.

[Cronos]

sounds good and it could be very funny

[Gluttony]

When it comes to the title, I figure that this is the one I like right now. I have all the time in the world to change it if necessary. I still call the movie by it's working title for now (Leprosy and Cheerleaders almost works, but sounds a little to formal and gives people the idea of what the movie is about. I like a little sabotage in my marketing).

!?! is more than likely going to be followed by a subtitle, which most people will end up using as a title anyway (more than likely). At this point, if you have to say the title... just call it Fugnah in a confused tone and you'll get the idea.

On a lighter note, I feel like a moron because I misplaced my outline. Basically, I'm working from memory until I find it. Not to bad, since I know the story inside to out. Some of the details are fuzzy and I lost it at the worst point, but a minor set back at best.

Thanks for the title ideas, I'll be sure to run some more by this thread as I think of them.

[Gluttony]

A town's homecoming, a mental breakdown, and inflatable sumo wrestlers were just some of the the obstacles impeding me from accomlishing anything this weekend or up to today. Sorry that I don't have much of an update, but I'm stuck on a detailed scene and haven't flt right about completeing it yet.I'll try and do so today.

On a lighter note, I've begun researching some of the effects and have decided that no matter how hard or expensive, the bowel burrowing badger is going to be in stop motion! If anyone knows where I can find and/or purchase a book on the art, I would be grateful.

BUMP- for the inflatable sumo wrestler who stole my heart.

[Gluttony]

Okay, so my hometown is done with their noisy celebration and I have sat down to try and finish the romantic/conflict scenes in which the main characters profess love and I keep cracking jokes about religion.

As for the character table, I think that is going to have to wait. I tried to do it, but my computer is giving me shit and I've got some personal issues that are starting interphere with my epic. I call it an epic because I feel like it, dammit.

I was talking with a sociology teacher a couple of days ago and he helped me further explore the mind's of the characters andI think some major changes to the last third of the flick are going to be necessary.

And I still don't know where that inflatable sumo wreslter is goign to come in. I thought he could fist fight Jesus, but I already had him knock out a chicken man... It's seems rather repetative.

Until later... um, BUMP. Because there is very little worthwhile information in this post.

[Kocko]

Where are the farking ninjas man?

Add them and you have the complete package. :)

[RAC]

I like what I am seeing so far. The title didn't really catch my attention, but the plot with this kid with limbs falling off sounds hilarious. I already have the mental picture of a teenage boy dunking a basketball and landing on the ground to find that his arm is still stuck on the rim. :D

[Gluttony]

That's scene is in there!!!

As for the ninjas... I'm working on it. I've already had some martial arts in the mix and the inflatable sumo-wrestler too. They'll probably come into play during the last act.

[Gluttony]

Okay so my computer had a violent hiccup and some of my work was erased. It was only a page or so, but it seriously hurt my momentum. I'm doing a rewrite (cursing the entire way) but I'm taking it slow with my computer and trying to write it better.

I have a couple more ideas for a script and I was thinking about writing them next... I have them written down somewhere (one has even made it through half of the outline stage). I'm trying to not get distracted though...

Anyway, BUMP for sake of those lepers... and ninjas.

[tvmorbid]

I REALLY don't know why but Toxic Avenger kept popping into my head as I've read thru this thread :confused: Anyways, sounds like a really cool idea, ninjas, cheerleader and lepers, what more could you ask for? Well.... maybe some midgets and clowns (brrrr, clowns) Or maybe ninja midgets dressed as clowns!

.......

Ok forget I said that.

[p1phillips]

I would LOVE to see this script get made. It sounds right up my alley.

As for a title...Limber?