Schmoe lyrics...whatcha think?

[LoomisFan]

Hey. I'm really nervous about this, so be nice, but be honest. I've been writing lyrics, lately, and I was wondering if any of you can give me an opinion on a couple of these.

This first song is meant to be sung in kind of a light falsetto (Thom Yorke style). It's probably best suited for the piano.
"Former"
Mister Opportunity's knocking
But I don't wanna open the door
Tell him just to keep on walking
This boy ain't gonna dance, anymore
I haven't since the day you decided
To give up on us and disappear
But no matter how much I try to hide it
There's really only one thing that's clear
CHORUS: I wanna dance, I wanna dance, love, love, love
I wanna dance, I wanna dance, love, love
I wanna dance, I wanna dance, love
Oh, former, when are you gonna quit
Reminding me of transgressions past?
I'm sorry everything went to shit
In this sadness, how long can I last?
Everytime you walk down the street
Reminds me of the day we broke up
And I just stare down at my feet
I know I never deserved your love
CHORUS



The lyrics of this one are a bit more cryptic, but basically it's about a guy getting a ride home with a girl that he loves and he's jealous of her boyfriend. All he can think about is how much he loves listening to her sing along to the radio, regardless of her lack of vocal talent. This one's more suited to a soft, acoustic style.
"Keep Singing"
There's a spectre in the air
Your rubber marks the roads
Much better than the fair
Is at halting our growth
Screams carry in the wind
Exploding on the dark
Don't ponder any trend
We're passing now the park
CHORUS:
So darling, just smile at me
And keep singing off-key
You don't have to say you love me
'Cause you don't expect anything of me
Just sing off-key
The moon a constant fixture
Another castle makes me smile
Punkers are our overture
The houses rushing for a mile
I want it to never ever end
I watch your hair blow in the breeze
I have never felt this zen
Next to the solid green of trees
CHORUS
The serpent's fangs loom nearby
Please don't get out just yet, girl
He won't scream for your love, like I
He wouldn't say that you're his world
And even if such came to pass
It wouldn't hold my meaning, child
I peer at lips beyond your glass
The raging storm of salt grows wild
CHORUS
I figure, love, I'll never tell you
As I step on the way of drive
How over time my passion grew
And how you make me feel alive
Meow, meow, let it go in
Watch you back out another moon
I guess I'm just not built to win
At least not you and no time soon


That's all I'll post for now. I'd appreciate feedback (good or bad). Also, if any of you Schmoes have some lyrics you'd like to post, feel free!