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Old 06-26-2003, 08:31 PM
Joblo.com's Harry Potter Fan Fiction Experience

NOTE FROM MODERATOR: These pieces are meant to be AFTER the 5th novel, so spoilers are likely to arise from minor ones to majors one. Do not read below or ask to participate until after you've finished "The Order of the Phoenix"

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This is like a game, except with no winner or loser. Its going to be quite fun yet sometimes hard, but you’ll be glad you participated! In the game everyone will get a change to write a short piece in Harry Potter style. We’ll bring each piece together to make one chapter of the fan fiction book we‘ll be making. This isn’t going to be exclusive at all except we do have some rules you must follow.

  • You must contact me or DH1989 if you wish to play.
  • You must look over your short piece and make sure there are no spelling errors, if you must, (which I highly reccommend) cut and paste your excerpt to Microsoft Word, Apple Works, etc., and have it checked for any mistakes. Tiny mistakes are okay, but nothing where the readers won’t be able to understand what your saying.
  • All short peices must be at the lest 3 paragraphs. If you want to go above and beyond the expectations that is perfectly fine and we wouldn’t mind either!
Rules for writing your short peice:
  • No cussing.
  • Romance is okay, but no sexual acts.
  • No "insanity". Try and keep the tone similar to Rowling's novels.
  • You have 3 days to post your peice
  • Have fun.

If you think there are any rules that must be added Say so!

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List of chapters so far:

01. Harry & Ginny
02. Fatal Decisions

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Who’s writing the current short piece:


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Old 06-26-2003, 08:40 PM
It was a brutally hot day in the middle of August. On the quiet street of Privet Drive, an overweight boy was sitting on the lawn, smoking a cigarette. He was positioned in the lawn so that his nosey mother, with the longest neck in the world, could not see him. This boy was named Dudley Dursley. To describe him, one would think of words such as "cruel" and "unintelligent". Dudley thought he was alone, but from a high window, a 16-year old boy with messy black hair and beautiful green eyes watched him. This boy was named Harry Potter.

Harry was, at the moment, sullen and sad. His greatest nemesis, Lord Voldemort, has come back into power. He knows the wizarding world he lives in for most of the year is in great danger. He wants to strike out. Attack Voldemort from the inside. Bring down his evil organization. But's he stuck living with a group of the worst muggles you could even fathom. He was living off a puny dinner of a bread and cheese. He was dying to return to Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry. He was dying to fly his broom, meet with friends Ron and Hermione, and, most of all, try to get back with Cho Chang. All of this longing was rolling around in his head in the form of depressing thoughts.

Just as Harry started to think a clock was going backwards, making his return to Hogwarts seem farther and farther away, he heard a scream. It was from the kitchen. Harry jumped up and slowly cracked open the door. He jetted down the stairs like a lightning bolt. When he reached the kitchen, he saw a horrible image. His Aunt Petunia was being attacked by a man in a dark robe and a mask. A Death Eater. Harry did not know what to do. He pulled out his wand and ran forward.

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Old 06-26-2003, 08:57 PM
There we go and DH1989 has started us off with the first short peice, and I must say it is very exciting! If nobody has any objections, I'll be going next
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Old 06-26-2003, 09:23 PM
Before Harry could reach his Aunt the overweight boy who was sitting outside smoking a cigarette, Harry’s cousin Dudley, came running in the front door with horror on his long drowsy stupid face. Harry stopped at once before Dudley would collide with him. Dudley ran straight to the Death Eater to defend his mother. The Death Eater turned his face to see Dudley take a swing with his large chunky fists. The Death Eater yelled “Petrificus Totalus!” and Dudley froze then fell right to the ground. “MY BABY!” shrieked Aunt Petunia. Harry didn’t like the Durlseys but he felt like he had to protect them.

Harry ran right up to the Death Eater and yelled “ Expelliarmus”. The Death Eater’s wand rose into the air and fell right in front of the Dursley’s refrigerator. “RUN!” yelled Harry to his aunt while she grabbed her frozen son’s body and ran out the door. “You silly, silly, little boy, think you can stand up to the dark lords servants, think you’ll get away with it again?” said the Death Eater. Harry recognized the voice which belonged to Lucius Malfoy. But Lucius Malfoy was sent to Azkaban Harry thought to himself.


A Regular sized brown owl was right outside the Dursley’s window banging on the glass. Harry knew what it was about. He used magic outside of school underage which was not prohibited. Harry didn’t really care right now. He had rage going through his entire body, just less then 2 months ago the man standing in front of him tried to kill him and his closest friends. “There’s nobody here to save you Potter, your in the Muggle world now” Malfoy grinned “Dumbledore isn‘t here to protect you nor is your worthless god father Sirius Black!”. The Owl kept banging on the window furiously. Harry was so upset by the words he just heard. Malfoy had just insulted his dead Godfather and his head master Dumbledore who was like a friend to Harry. Harry raised his wand and yelled “STUPEFY!”.

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Old 06-26-2003, 10:42 PM
I recieved a private message from jolanar asking to participate, so he/she will go next, and continue off DevilMonkey's great short piece!
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Old 06-26-2003, 10:54 PM
Originally posted by dh1989
I recieved a private message from jolanar asking to participate, so he/she will go next, and continue off DevilMonkey's great short piece!
Sounds good, thanks for the compliment, Sleekproductions wants to go after Jolanar posts their short peice Can't wait!
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Old 06-27-2003, 10:47 AM
But nothing happened! Harry looked to his wand in confusion, "Why hadn't the spell worked?" he thought to himself. But his thoughts were interrupted by the insane laughter of the Death Eater.

Lucius managed to spurt out during his howls of laughter, "Dear boy, even I had thought you a better wizard than that!" Harry still transfixed by the fact his spell hadn't worked, raised his arm and yelled "STUPEFY!" this time it worked! Lucius Malfoy, one of the top Death Eaters under the dark Lord Voldemort, was lying unconscious in the Dursley's kitchen.

Then something Harry feared even more than a Death Eater in his own house, came running down the stairs. Vernon Dursley was never fond of his wizard nephew by no means at all. The constant sputtering of half finished curse words, and empty threats left Vernon's mouth as he came running down the stairs was plenty proof to Harry that he was in for it. "THIS IS THE LAST STRAW POTTER!!"

But Harry wasn’t paying attention to his uncle anymore, for Lucius Malfoy was beginning to regain consciousness, Harry begin to cast another spell to stop the Death Eater, but he was interrupted when his uncle grabbed his arm and raised him a foot off the ground! Harry only then realized Vernon hadn’t seen the robed man in his kitchen yet, and it was too late anyway for he was already standing up!

Hope that works, next person!
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Old 06-27-2003, 10:55 AM
Great job Jolanar! It's SleekProductions turn!
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Old 06-28-2003, 07:20 AM
MODERATOR NOTE: It is not HedwigX's turn, and he/she clearly did not take the time to read the rules, so please disregard the following. It is not a part of our story....

"STUPEFY!" a voice yelled.
Malfoy fell to the floor again.
"Vernon, I suggest that you put Harry down." the voice continued. Uncle Vernon span around, so Harry could see the person who had cast the spell.
"You!" Uncle Vernon yelled, purple in the face.
"Me, Vernon."
"What are you doing here? I told you never to set foot in this house again! Get out!"
"Technically, Albus Dumbledore isn't setting foot in this house. And I will not until I have told Harry what he needs to know."
"What do I need to know?" Harry interrupted.
The man turned to look at Harry. His eyes were blue, and had grey hair. His face looked worn and tired. He wore a long cloak with a hood. He sighed when he looked at Harry.
"You look so like your father. You have your mother's eyes though."
He then resumed a business like voice.
"I am to escort you to 12, Grimmauld Place to meet my brother. He needs to speak to you on matters concerning the Order of the Phoenix, and your friends."
"My friends? What's happened?" Harry asked, loosening himself from Uncle Vernon's grip, "Who are you?"
"I can't tell you what has happened yet, but we have to leave now. Oh, my name's Dumbledore, by the way. Aberforth Dumbledore."

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Old 06-29-2003, 01:06 AM
HedwigX it wasn't your turn. If you read the thread completely through yo would notice that it was Sleekproductions turn. If you still want to take part PM me and you still can

Also remember that Harry Usally spends 2 chapters with The Dursleys.
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Old 06-29-2003, 06:38 AM

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Old 06-29-2003, 12:51 PM

It is unfair to people if you post your short peice before PM me or DH1989 asking if you want to go! It says that right up there the first rule! and it also says that you need to keep it in Rowlings style, you wrote it like a play! And it didn't even take place off from where we were, follow directons, sheesh!

To Everyone:


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Old 06-30-2003, 10:18 PM
Okay,come on SLeekproductions, we are all eager to write and read some more so post your peice, HedwigX has Pm'd me and is going after Sleekproductions,
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Old 07-01-2003, 01:26 PM
Dumbledore DOES have a brother by the way, DevilMonkey! He is mentioned in GoF AND OotP! Aberforth Dumbledore!
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Old 07-09-2003, 10:20 AM
SleekProductions has had more than 3 days to add a piece! I believe it should be my turn instead!
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Old 07-09-2003, 11:46 AM
Originally posted by HedwigX
SleekProductions has had more than 3 days to add a piece! I believe it should be my turn instead!
You wait, the wait will be worth it, Sleek is working and he is the one exception. After his peice the three day rule applies.
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Old 07-12-2003, 07:04 PM
This is getting good.
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Old 07-15-2003, 11:46 AM

Sad news...

SleekProductions wrote a 30+ page peice and lost it. He says he went extremely overboard and wants to be skipped, so now it is HedwigX's turn!
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Old 07-16-2003, 10:04 AM
At that moment, several things happened all at once in every direction. In Harry's eyeline was a furious Lucius Malfoy, raising his wand and yelling "STUPEFY!" To Harry's left, Aunt Petunia screamed as Dudley waddled straight into her, bowling her over completely. Behind Harry, Uncle Vernon gave out a deafening roar, before falling flat on his back as the spell hit him square in the chest, bringing Harry. Harry felt a huge burst of pain in his scar, let go of his wand and his head began to bleed as he hit the corner of the table. Lucius Malfoy stood triumphant over the unconcious Uncle Vernon and Aunt Petunia, hysterical Dudley, and bleeding Harry.

Harry looked up reluctantly as Malfoy picked up his wand, lying in the middle of the kitchen floor.

"Well, well, well. I'm going to enjoy watching you die, Potter. Just as I was there when the Dark Lord killed your parents." Malfoy hissed, clearly enjoying Harry's situation.

Malfoy attempted to point his wand between Harry's eyes, but wasn't quick enough as Harry hurtled into his stomach, winding him. Malfoy fell to the floor as Harry tried to get his wand out of the Death Eater's grasp. Everything seemed to slow down as he pulled uselessly at his wand. He faintly heard Dudley screaming behind him:

"NOOO! Not again!"

At the same time as he realised what Dudley meant, Harry's insides froze. A feeling of dread washed over him as the Dementor's scaly, scabby hand grasped his neck tightly. It picked Harry up, and turned him to face the horrific sight of over twenty Dementors gliding towards him, with another two about to administer the kiss. He saw a vague outline of Malfoy's face, laughing, and Harry realised the truth. He was going to die. His luck had finally ran out. He was going to die, if not at Malfoy's hands, but at the Dementors. He would never see Ron and Hermione again. Or Hagrid, whom he hadn't even said goodbye to at the end of their last meeting. He'd see his parents and Sirius again...

At that moment, a force ripped through the kitchen, leaving no Dementors, and a heavily burnt Lucius Malfoy. Harry's scar burned with such intensity as he heard Malfoy's bloodcurdling screams, that he gradually lost conciousnes all together, and seemed to fall into a deep, coma-like sleep.
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Old 07-16-2003, 10:08 AM
Sorry about the cliffy, but was it worth the wait?

Could we end the chapter there,because I have a good name for Chapter 1 if it is!

Chapter 1- The Attack At Number Four
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Old 07-16-2003, 11:49 AM
Very well done Hedwig qnd it was indeed worth the wait, well you asked about ending the chaoter except I think it is very early and Haqrry needs to get his O.W.L. results back preferablly today after it is July 31, still too early to end the chapter, and your tittle is a little to direct because we know Number Four and J.K.R. usally keeps you guessing or has pecular names. Well now it is DH1989's turn, good luck!
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Old 07-16-2003, 11:13 PM
Harry opened his eyes slowly. His glasses were not on, and all he saw was the blurry ceiling of his home on Privet Drive. His body was stiff, and he could feel a severe burn on his left arm. He heard the front door open, and listened intently as the sound of large boots walking across the floor drew closer and closer to him. He then heard a stern voice utter a short sentence.

"The boy, was he hurt?," said Moody. Harry would know that voice anywhere.

Harry was then shocked to hear another man's voice answer. This man was behind him. It was Lupin.

"Indeed, Alastor. Arthur Weasley's curse got rid of most of those damn Dementors and has caused Lucius Malfoy to earn a one-way ticket to St. Mungo's. I sent Flitwick up there to guard him, make sure he doesn't try and escape. Anyway, Harry's arm caught on fire, but I put it out. Once Pomfrey arrives, he'll be fixed up."

"Remus, you said 'most' of the Dementors were destroyed? Are you saying some survived Arthur's curse?," asked Moody in a nervous voice.

"Yeah, a few were just lightly burned, and they fled west. Now, Alastor, before you pick up your wand and weapons, I've already dispathed two perfectly capable wizards to kill them. Tonks and Severus Snape," said Lupin in a warning tone. Harry was fairly sure Lupin did not want Moody to go into battle in a Muggle town.

"Excuse me? Lupin, I know I am not a young man anymore, but I still have fine hearing, and I swear my ears told me you said you sent an ex-Death Eater to destroy Dementors. Hell, he'll probably send a spell to disable Tonks, and let the damn soul-suckers go free!," snarled Moody.

"Damn it, Alastor! Are you really man who condemns another fellow man for his whole life, due to a few misdeeds? Snape turned spy, he pledged his support to Dumbledore, he may be nasty, I don't deny it, but he's fighting WITH us, not against us," said Lupin, raising his tone a bit. "And, I am suprised you are so against having him in the Order! I'd think an old grouch like you would have fun spying on him, keeping tabs on the poor man."

"Many say we should keep our friends close, and our enemies closer, but you know I am a bit paranoid, so having enemies so close just rubs me the wrong way. Now, I have no more time to talk. You're a fool. Snape is the villian here! And I am going after him. Hopefully, I'll be able to stop him before he does something to show old Voldemort he's still a close friend!"

Harry then heard Moody stomp away and exit #4 Privet Drive.
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Old 07-17-2003, 12:56 AM
Very good DH, I will now be going, I'll have it posted by the end of tomarrow because it is hard to get internet access here, well I gotta get started.
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Old 07-17-2003, 02:06 AM
Harry sat up to say hello to Lupin when he heard a huge bang on the window. It was the bird from before still there banging. When Harry stood up he heard Lupin call to him. “Oh Harry!” he reached in his pocket “Your going to be fine, I got you something.” Lupin Pulled out a small container with a ton of purple goop in it. “What’s that?” Harry asked Lupin staring at the goop. “Oh of coarse. It’s called ‘Weasley Sticky Ick”. He opened the container and yellow smoke came flying out turning the goop a bloody red. “Its absolutely delicious, and its made by Fred and George. They’re doing great at Diagon Alley, making tons of money of coarse.”. When Harry heard this a huge smile spread across his face and he forgot about the bird, the pain, the Dursleys and Voldemort. He felt happy for the Weasley twins, it was Harry who helped them get started and he was glad it was working well. “They’ve made tons of new delicious candy, when I was at Diagon alley just two days ago there was a line going straight down to the end of Florish and Blotts! I didn’t have time to wait in line, I got to go straight to the front when George saw me. They had tons of workers, and that Rita Skeeter women was doing a report on the instant success they are. Its going to be in Monday’s Daily Profit, only two days away. Now why don‘t you try it.”. Harry reached for the container and pulled some of the goop out. “It tickles your tongue” Lupin said with a huge smile. Harry put the goop in his mouth and it started fizzing, it tasted delicious, Harry had a happy feeling run through his body. He wanted more. The goop had totally turned to liquid and Harry swallowed what was left. “Can I have some more, please” Harry asked politely “Of course its yours! Have it all!” Lupin answered.

Lupin looked behind Harry and saw the Owl. Harry looked too but the Owl looked angry, it was knocking very hard now. Lupin walked over to the Window and let the bird in. It dropped the letter in Harry’s hands and flew out. It wasn’t from the ministry. It was from someone else. Harry opened the letter and asked Lupin “Could I please read this by myself?”. Harry was nervous they might be his O.W.L. results. Lupin answered “Of course, its your personal things, If after you read it and think I should see it that’s fine.”. Harry sat on the coach and started reading.

Dear Harry Potter,

You probably remember me from the Triwizard tournament. My name is Gabrielle Delocour. My sister is Fleur and I’m certain you remember her. You rescued me from the lake. I am writing to you because of You-Know-Who’s return. The school I should have been going to this year is called Bauxbatons was closed because of rumors and weird th5ngs that have been -going on during the summer. It was rumored that You-Know-Who was hiding under the school with his followers. Now that Bauxbatons is closed I will be going to Hogwarts and try to improve my English. The new Defense Against the Dark Arts teacher’s name is Bernard Pimentel and was the old Defense Against The Dark Arts Teacher at Bauxbatons. My sister says he is an evil man but tries not to show, she says he’ll do something behind your back or when your not looking. My other friend who started her first year last year at Bauxbatons said that many people believed he was one who helped Murder, plot and befriend the Dark Lord. Incase you in counter Professor Pimentel this summer at Diagon Alley where he is working during the summer be very polite or else he‘ll think something is up. Fleur says he has mentioned you in classes before not in a positive way and Cleary does not like you already. I will see you at Hogwarts, have a great summer.

Your Sincerely,

Harry felt a little funny by what he just read. “Is our new Defense Against the Dark Arts teacher this year going to be a guy called Bernard Pimentel?” Harry asked Lupin. “Yes, how do you know?” someone I don’t really know to well sent me a letter warning me about how he already hates me and she thinks he’s a death eater.”. Lupin laughed. “Oh nonsense, Bernard is a good man. Who wrote you the letter?” “Gabrielle Delocour” Harry replied. “Oh yes, I know her, she’s Fleur’s sister correct?” Lupin asked. “Er… Yeah, how did you know?” Harry said “Oh Fleur and Bill have been going out and I made they’re acutance. She’ll be working at Hogwarts this year as a Potion’s Master’s Helper because Snape will be out very often this year.”

Hope that works, Next’ll be Jolanar.

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Old 07-17-2003, 10:01 AM
I didn't mean that the force was a wizard! I meant that the (quasi)Fidelius Charm that Dumbledore put on Number Four would not allow Harry to be harmed within the house. This was what wiped out the Dementors. But at least you and dh1989 came up with a better explanation.
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Old 07-17-2003, 01:30 PM
Oops! I forgot to have Lupin say Happy B-Day to Harry, If the next person would be kid enough to somehow throw that in that'd be great, thanks!

Don't forget, next is Jolanar !
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Old 07-18-2003, 06:19 PM
"So do you really think Moody believes Snape is still a death eater?" asked Harry. He didn't want to lose the oppurtinity to gain more information on what had just transpired.

A small grin came across Lupin's face. "Well I think we have all doubted Snapes loyalty at one time or another. But after seeing the work he has done for the Order, I think most have gained his complete trust. Besides Moody and Snape have disliked eachother since before you were born."

"What do you mean, 'the work Snape has done for the Order'?" This was a rare occasion when Harry might not be left out of the loop. He was begenning to get excited.

"Well Snape has been completely loyal to the Order of the Pheonix. However much it may hurt to say, he has been doing the most dangerous work of all of us. After all he is in direct contact with the dea..." Both Harry and Lupin's eyes went wide. Lupin because he had slipped, and given Harry some information that could put them all at risk, and Harry because he couldn't wait to tell Hermoine and Ron!

"Ermm" Lupin cleared his throat to break the silence. "Well lets just say he does undercover work." Harry was almost certain that his his former Defense Agains't the Dark Arts teacher had meant to say "Death Eaters" before he caught what he was doing.

Trying to end the awkward moment, Lupin said "Oh Harry, I almost plum forgot! Happy Birthday!"

"Wait it's not my birthday, your mistaken. Tomorrow is my birthday." Harry said, putting an infasis on tomorrow.

"No lad, today is tomorrow! If you catch my drift, you were unconscious for longer than you think. Here, I have a present for you." Lupin reached deeped into his robes, it looked like he was conjuring something under them. And knowing the wizard world, Harry thought he very well may be.

"Here I saw it in Diagon Alley, I thought it would be perfect for you!" He said as he handed Harry a plain box.

Harry, with a big grin on his face and all his troubles lost, opened the box. For a moment, there was no Lord Voldemort. There was no prophecy, and there was no death eaters or dementors. He looked into the box, and was amazed by what he saw. His jaw dropped as he took out the gift... only for him to then ask, "What is it?!?!"

I couldn't think of a gift, so I left it open for the next person to decide. Good writing to yah! Next!!!

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Old 07-20-2003, 05:16 AM
Good job jolanar, just one little thing. In the first peice by DH1989 he said Harry was already 16, beside that great job.


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Old 07-20-2003, 05:27 AM
DevilMonkey, I would have PM'd this to you, but your mailbox is full ---

May I please go after HedwigX? Thx.
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Old 07-20-2003, 06:05 AM
Yeah, my box isn't full though it just doesn't let me receive PMS.. I DELETED ALL MY MESSAGES!!!!
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Old 07-24-2003, 03:48 AM
Sorry, HedwigX, your time is up, it is now DH1989's turn!
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Old 07-24-2003, 04:32 AM
"A wand holder."

Harry stared down at the object in the box. It was made of cloth, but shined silver, like a Sickle. It was small, and circular, with a slight opening on both ends, for the wand to slide in, Harry assumed.

"Why do I need a wand holder?," asked Harry.

"For the new Dueling Club at Hogwarts, this year."

Harry thought of the last Dueling Club, in his 2nd year, and the odd experience it was. And then the image of Lockhart smiling, which disgusted Harry, popped into Harry's mind. "Um, Remus, who's our teacher?"

Lupin looked nervous for a moment, then said, "Mrs. Umbridge."

"Excuse me?," spat Harry, in a shocked and angry tone. "UMBRIDGE?! Surely, you don't mean Dolores Umbridge, last year's Defense Against The Dark Arts teacher? I can't believe Dumbledore would do this. She took my property, led me into danger, and let's not forget my hand!" With that, Harry threw up his arm, showing his hand, where a light scar read: "I will not tell lies. I will not tell lies."

"Oh no, Harry! Not Dolores Umbridge. The last I saw of her was a, er......, torso Hagrid found on the edge of the Forbidden Forest. I'm talking about Maggie Umbridge, Dolores' daughter. Maggie works at the Ministry of Magic, controlling inter-Ministry memos, but she used to work for the Aurors, as an assistant, where she learned to be the quite the Dueler, ergo Dumbledore hired her. Which, actually, suprised me....," said Lupin, out of breath at the end.

"Why would you be suprised?," asked Harry in an instant.

"Well, Pimentel and her have a... history. She fought him once, in a forest in Germany. That's why she's no longer working with the Aurors. He sued, that is was an unprovoked attack, and she was merely attacking him for no reason. She stood up in court and said she had respectable intelligence that he was the lead recruiter for Voldemort. The court asked for the documents telling this, but she could not hand them over, or risk the life of the informant. Anyway, Harry, I must leave. I have let time get away from me, and I must be off to talk with... someone."

Lupin swiftly walked away, and Harry called out "THANKS!" for the gift. Lupin turned, smile, turned away, and exited. As the door slammed shut, Harry heard an owl rapping at the window. He stood up, threw it open, and the owl zoomed in. The bird dropped the letter on the floor and was off again, into the misty, late-afternoon sky. He tore the letter open, and read to himself....

Dear Mr. Potter,

Good afternoon, I am an employee of the O.W.L./N.E.W.T. grading leauge at the Ministry of Magic. Over the last few weeks, we've been going through every exam, seeing what the initial instructor gave the student, and if we concur. At 5:12 AM BST, yesterday, wizard Laurel Abbott approved your grades, and they've been added to your records. Here are your finalized grades for the 5th year O.W.L.s ---

Astronomy --- A / 3 O.W.L.s

Care of Magical Creatures --- E / 4 O.W.L.s

Charms --- E / 4 O.W.L.s

Defense Against The Dark Arts - O / 5 O.W.L.s

Divination - P / 3 O.W.L.s

Herbology - E / 4 O.W.L.s

History of Magic - A / 3 O.W.L.s

Potions - O / 5 O.W.L.s

Transfiguration - E / 4 O.W.L.s

Amount of O.W.L.s needed to go forward to your 6th year? 27.

Amount you recieved? 35.

Have a good night!

- Maria Sandulli

Harry felt a feeling of pride sweep his body, but was it followed by a bellow from outside ---

"Harry! Run!"

Harry turned and saw a bloody Snape running towards him, followed by a Dementor, who was covered in human blood, and had it's scabby hands held out.

Snape yelled, "Harry run, fast! It's after you!"

Harry shot up and belted towards the backdoor. Snape smiled. But then he tripped on a rug, and the Dementor pounced. He leaned down over Snape, and said, in a dark, hissing voice ---

"James, Voldemort wants you dead, for good. So, be ready to experience a new Kiss. A stronger one."

The Dementor's scabby hand grabbed Snape's face, and tore the skin off, revealing another face. That of James Potter. The Dementor leaned down, and was about to kiss him...

Harry was running fast through the grass of the backyard. He fell, and turned back to look, and what he saw shocked him....

His father, alive. About to be kissed by a Dementor. Harry didn't know what to do.....

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Old 07-24-2003, 12:01 PM
At this moment Harry had no idea what happened. He shook his head and then he heard “Expecto Patronum!” come from a voice behind of him. Harry turned and saw Lupin. He still hadn’t left. But this did nothing. Harry grabbed his wand and yelled it too, but the Dementor stood there showing no pain.

“EXPECTO PATRONUM!” both Harry and Lupin yelled.

There patronus’ combined with each other and formed a huge Spider. The spider was probably 10 feet tall and 10 feet wide. It moved toward the Dementor. The Dementor turned to look at the spider. At the moment the Dementor turned James apparated. As all this happened Harry felt a little dizzy. So much was happening at once.

“Come on Harry don’t be stupid, lets go!” Lupin yelled reaching in his pocket.

Lupin took to little pouches out of his pocket. He threw one at the Dementor creating tons of smoke. Lupin opened the other and Harry recognized it as floo powder. But Harry thought that you have to do something with the ministry if you want to floo into a muggle home. But it wasn’t floo powder. Lupin threw some at Harry.

“Did he see you?” asked Dumbledore.

Harry knew he wasn’t at Number 4 anymore but it felt like just one second ago, a Dementor was in his aunt and uncle’s house.

“I’m afraid so. . .” this was Snape’s voice just not as cold and evil, he sounded like an actual human being.

Harry took his glasses off and rubbed his eyes. He could see clearly now and he had no idea where he was. He stood up to look around.

“Oh Harry!” said Dumbledore. He continued “I need you to go through that door over there, Ron and Fleur are in there waiting for you”.

That’s all I’ve got for now, I would have written way more but this damn French keyboard makes it really tough to type.

Now its jolanar's turn, good luck!

Last edited by DevilMonkey; 07-24-2003 at 12:18 PM..
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Old 07-24-2003, 06:03 PM
Can you explain the grading scores for the owls please?

Also man how the heck am I going to explain the James Potter thing, that just came out of nowhere. If every single person is going to right a huge plot twist in the story it's gonna get old fast. We need to create some kind of "quest" for potter.

How long are you guys planning for this to be?

Anyways I am just thinking outloud. I suppose Ill get started on my part.
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Old 07-24-2003, 10:33 PM
Originally posted by jolanar
Can you explain the grading scores for the owls please?

Also man how the heck am I going to explain the James Potter thing, that just came out of nowhere. If every single person is going to right a huge plot twist in the story it's gonna get old fast. We need to create some kind of "quest" for potter.
O.W.L. grading scores ---

O = Outstanding

E = Exceeds Expectations

A = Average

P = Poor

D = Dreadful

T = Troll

Anyway, many students have also talked about the "amount of O.W.L.s" they recieved, so I made up the credit system. 5 for an "O" to 0 for a "T".

Also, I have a long and detailed explanation about the story, events, etc. leading up to the moment at the end of my piece, in regards to the James/Severus twist. Of course, something in your story may fuck it up, but I can re-work it.
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Old 07-25-2003, 05:07 AM
Yeah Jolanar you should just stay away from the James thing. Just continue the story without James but don't try and cover it up.
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Old 07-25-2003, 05:56 AM
Also man how the heck am I going to explain the James Potter thing
You don't have to, let DH do that

How long are you guys planning for this to be?
Preety long I suppose, J.K.R. says the -th book is going to be about the same length as Azkaban
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Old 07-25-2003, 07:24 AM
Sorry I missed my turn! I've been on holiday for a week!

dh1989, 3 words...


Bloody hell! James isn't Snape! It's impossible! Bloody hell!

*Ahem* Is it my turn?
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Old 07-25-2003, 07:25 AM
Oh, I just checked my inbox. DevilMonkey says it is.
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Old 07-25-2003, 10:34 AM
Originally posted by HedwigX
Oh, I just checked my inbox. DevilMonkey says it is.
No, that was before your time was up. . . And no DH isnt insane, you'll see, your turn is after Jolanar who is going now.
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