At The Mercy Of The Credit Gods

[Vedus Hate]

When life inspires art....

                                                       FADE IN:

               INT BANK

               ELGIN sits behind his desk clicking away at a keyboard. STEVE
               Stevens appears at the door.

                                   ELGIN
                         Hey. Come on in. Have a seat. How
                         can I help you today?

                                   STEVE
                         I've been trying to get a line of
                         credit.

                                   ELGIN
                         Excellent, I hope I can help. So
                         what's your name?

                                   STEVE
                         Steve Stevens.

                                   ELGIN
                         Okay. And you have an account here
                         with the bank.

                                   STEVE
                         Yes, I do.

                                   ELGIN
                         Great. This'll just take a quick
                         second while I, oh. Well. That's.

               Elgin bursts in to laughter. 

                                   STEVE
                         Is there a problem?

                                   ELGIN
                         I'm, jeez, I'm sorry about that.

                                   STEVE
                         That's okay.

                                   ELGIN
                         It's just that, uh.

               He bursts in to laughter again.

                                   ELGIN
                         Ah, sorry. Just hold on a second,
                         okay?

                                   STEVE
                         Yeah, sure.

               Elgin slaps a button on the phone. It dials and rings through
               speaker phone.

                                   MARTY (O.S.)
                         Marty.

                                   ELGIN
                         Hey, Marty. You got a minute.

                                   MARTY (O.S.)
                         Sure.

                                   ELGIN
                         Great, can you come over to my
                         office for a moment.

                                   MARTY (O.S.)
                         I'll be right there.

               Elgin slaps another button on the phone.

                                   ELGIN
                         This'll just take a minute.

                                   STEVE
                         Of course.

               MARTY pops in to the room.

                                   MARTY
                         What's up?

                                   ELGIN
                         Well, Mr. Stevens here is inquiring
                         about a line of credit.

                                   MARTY
                         Okay. So what do you need me for?

                                   ELGIN
                         Come here and check this out.

               Marty checks out the information on the monitor. Elgin
               stifles a few chuckles while he reads. They both burst in
               to laughter.

                                   STEVE
                         So is that a no?

                                   ELGIN
                         Hey, you never know until you
                         process the application, right?

                                   STEVE
                         Seriously?

                                   ELGIN
                         No! Get the fuck out of my office.
                         Come back when you have money.

               Steve gets up to leave.

                                   ELGIN
                         Could you close the door on your
                         way out. Thanks.

               Steve exits and closes the door. Marty and Elgin continue
               laughing.

                                   MARTY
                         Thanks, I needed that.

                                   ELGIN
                         And right before the weekend. What
                         more could you ask for?

                                                       FADE OUT.

               THE END

Not necessarily looking for a critique. Just venting. I can't imagine making this as anything other than a flash animation.

[Ronaldinho]

There's a great old Simpsons when Homer is trying to buy an RV. The salesman enters his data into the computer and a siren on top of the computer goes off. What follows is something like:

HOMER: That's a good siren, right?

SALESMAN: You ever known a siren to be good?